Trying Too Hard

So I wanted to do something different for another picture in the gallery where Phillip's work is.  So I found a vantage point that I liked, and asked if he would walk slowly from one side of the room to the other, while I used a slow shutter speed.  I wanted to have him blurred, for a different feel to the picture.  This is not an original idea.  He showed me some amazing photographs that he had done for an advertising campaign for shoes that involved part of the model being blurred.  I have a weak mind and am easily influenced by others brilliant ideas!  But I am not sure that this photograph works all that well.  It's as if I tried too hard.